Lemon Drop {comic}

[Hombre Palido]

Somthing sweet and all...[glow=red,2,300]shonen ai[/glow] stuff.....yeah....mild language problems of mine..so please forgive... I have 2 pages here...and I haven't inked them..just edited...and...umm yeah I have more then..7...8 pages done..some need more work....more backgrounds and stuff...I'll add them in later....
but first...KYO IS A NINJA PAGE 1 AND 2!!
(Go from left to right...)




[glow=yellow,2,300]Lemon Drop[/glow]....

Major char:
Takami Sakurai (owns cafe, cooks/waiter)
Miyuzake Takai (student/part-timer)
Minor char:
Masa Yagani (dating Kai/waiter/waitress for cafe)
Kai Takaheshi (dating Masa/cashier for cafe)
(Go from righ TO left)



Masa is my uke-wussy-cry-baby-boy-toy.....of the story..but I love him call the same!! Kai is all...quiet, but he is quiet lovable according to Masa who lives with him. (Masa - 20, Kai - 24)
Yeah..age difference, but Miyu is 22 and Taka is 19 so..yeah AGE DIFFERENCE OMG!
It isn't perfect..but this IS my first serious comic so...I hope NO ONE HURTS ME!

[songbreese]

lol, nice.

[Hombre Palido]

songbreese said:

lol, nice.

Does it look okay? What do you think? Does it look okay for a first serious try? DOES IT!? I want a...what are those called....oh yeah! I want an evaluation yeah!

[songbreese]

well, I think the last picture where he's saying "I'm sorry" over and over could use a little clearing up, but otherwise it looks nice.

[Hombre Palido]

songbreese said:

well, I think the last picture where he's saying "I'm sorry" over and over could use a little clearing up, but otherwise it looks nice.

Like I said at the top....Imma workin on it...I haven't finalized EVERYTHING just yet...I haven't even inked it..XD I'll clear up some stuff soon enough yo!

[pythonheart]

well, i dont get the frame where he says, "how many times have i told you not to do 'that'".. do what? i cant tell *sniffle*
but i like it

[Hombre Palido]

pythonheart said:

well, i dont get the frame where he says, "how many times have i told you not to do 'that'".. do what? i cant tell *sniffle*
but i like it

Remember the part "STOP USING YOUR G@Y S3X APPEAL ON CUSTOMERS!" ? Well...that's it...

[twilight_angel]

I love Kyo is a Ninja! this is one of my favorites Katie!

[twilight_angel]

Katie,I think it's great. you have to post more of it...I know there's more...you let me read it!!

[Hombre Palido]

Heck no....

[twilight_angel]

...that's no fun...

[herm-own-ninny]

yeah, I read it too.

post more! *puppy eyes*

[twilight_angel]

Please Katie?