songbreese is working on a new story...

[songbreese]

so, this doesn't acually have a title yet cuz I can't come up with anything, but I'm working on it. I'd ask for suggestions, but I'm not far enough for you to get where I'm going enough to come up with a title yet. If anyone does get an idea, tell me, please. Anyway, here it is:

“No! I won’t do it! I refuse!” a girl stood in a chilly stone castle corridor, shouting at a man loud enough for the entire fiefdom to hear.
“It will bring honor to our family. This alliance will secure our family’s future for many generations,” the man spoke gently to the girl, which to the casual observer looked out of place for this tall man with dark hair and scraggly beard and a sharp-looking face.
“Father! Please, no! I beg you!” she threw herself down at the man’s feet, her long dark hair touched the ground and dust marred her simple but pretty seafoam-colored dress, tears ran down her face.
“I promised our good lord his son would have a match, I cannot go back on my word,” he attempted to reason calmly with his distraught daughter.
“No! Please! I can’t do it-I don’t know why-I just can’t! Please, don’t make me, please...” her voice broke down into sobs.
The man stared at his daughter a few moments, then sighed. “It’s alright, dear,” he said. “You don’t have to marry him.”
She looked up, her tears stopped. “I don’t?” she asked, unbelieving.
“No, my girl, you don’t,” he smiled at her.
“Oh, thank you Father, thank you!” her tears had returned, but this time they were tears of relief and joy.
“It’s alright, Alianne. Now get up off the floor,” he said gently.
She stood up shakily. “What about your promise? I’m so sorry,” she said regretfully.
“It’s okay,” he said, hugging her. “I think I have a solution.” He glanced over at an adjoining corridor where a slightly younger looking girl with pale blond hair and a white-embroidered white dress hid partially behind the wall, watching. Seeing her father glance in her direction, she slipped away, blushing slightly.


Yay! *runs off to write more*

[herm-own-ninny]

oooooooooo... I like.

It's all very intreging(sp?) Can't wait for more (well, I can, 'cause I know that pressure from readers is hard to deal with, but I soo want to read what comes next!)

oh, for the chapter 10 stuff (btw, I switched to the chosen) what do you have down? I don't have a clue what to write. If you don't either, then that's fine. I'll just make it all up.

good luck with this story <3

[twilight_angel]

sounds interesting. you should write more.

[songbreese]

idk for "The Chosen" I have to read cahpter 11 still...

[herm-own-ninny]

that's okay, I'll figure it out.

[songbreese]

yeah, so I haven't really had time to work on this recently cuz we've been busy with school and exams and stuff, but I'm hoping to write stuff over camp and then I'll post it when I get back. I've got it mostly planned out, I just need some more rising action sequences I think, and the end could use some work with what's going to happen...I have a couple ideas, I could do doom and gloom, doom and gloom a slightly different way that's not quite so gloomy but still pretty sad, slightly happier option, and of course I could have it all work out spiffy and happy and joyous but that would be a little hard to justify that much of a character's change in personality I think...I kinda like my second doom and gloom option, it's a little optimisting while still really sad so it's probably a good emotional ending that leaves something with the reader(and no, I'm not telling you exactly what these endings are or it'd ruin the story)

[herm-own-ninny]

I'd go with the second option. The last probably won't fit if you can't justify a character change, and the first is just too dang depressing.